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by Matty11
Sat Jul 20, 2019 5:56 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Striving for Perfection
Replies: 3
Views: 59

Re: Striving for Perfection

Occasionally I get a poem published in one of those journals that no one buys except the contributors and no one reads .....stronger with a verb ending? except the contributors' family members, recipients of a gift copy and they only read that single poem ...in general, don't split adjective/noun (...
by Matty11
Sat Jul 20, 2019 5:36 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Epistle to Ms Austen
Replies: 8
Views: 117

Re: Epistle to Ms Austen

the feel of this one is of the N sorting many personal issues out in said solitude in a kind of mind-whirl which does give me insight into the N's character. Thank you Linda. Insightful comment. I've been told this is more a technique than a form: The repetition of an end word at the beginning of t...
by Matty11
Thu Jul 18, 2019 5:30 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Epistle to Ms Austen
Replies: 8
Views: 117

Re: Epistle to Ms Austen

Thank you Dave and Tracy. Anadiplosis -  word for the day. http://www.tangledbranch.com/boards/images/smilies/icon_e_smile.gif Indeed, I didn't know that and agree with you on epistle :) There is a sharing of generalisations, That is true. After all, to make another generalisation, spiritual journey...
by Matty11
Tue Jul 16, 2019 4:26 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Epistle to Ms Austen
Replies: 8
Views: 117

Epistle to Ms Austen

Dear Jane, although I do not have your mind, A mind that makes moral choices so clear, Clear enough now for me to right my wrongs, The wrongs that take refuge in life's muddles, For muddles marinate in solitude; Yet solitude gives thought for humankind, A humankind in which we both belong, Belong be...
by Matty11
Tue Jul 16, 2019 4:24 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Grandpa's Row Boat
Replies: 5
Views: 97

Re: Grandpa's Row Boat

hi Linda Very much enjoyed the write: it is not a world I know, the rail life or the fishing one, but you gave me glimpse. On the crit. side I don't feel you need all croaking/cursing/hissing; and I'd cut most often. best Phil Grandpa's Row Boat Night was filled with loon calls, croaking dog fish in...
by Matty11
Sat Jul 13, 2019 6:19 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic:  Late Tomatoes
Replies: 7
Views: 113

Re:  Late Tomatoes

Very much enjoyed this Tracy. Particularly the tone and perspective.

best

Phil
by Matty11
Sat Jul 13, 2019 5:56 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Broken Homes
Replies: 12
Views: 169

Re: Broken Homes

I've just found where that advice came from... http://www.everypoet.org/pffa/showthread.php?9958-Lines-and-Linebreaks&s= I do agree with the comment:   A general rule, one of those ones with occasional exceptions, is that you should never separate a noun from its preceding adjective. It's a boring, ...
by Matty11
Fri Jul 12, 2019 7:02 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Broken Homes
Replies: 12
Views: 169

Re: Broken Homes

Some course notes I found:   First rule of the line: there are no rules. There are, however, some strong guidelines that will generally serve you well. For example, usually you shouldn't break after an article or conjunctive word -- such as "the" or "and" -- because they're unimportant words in most...
by Matty11
Fri Jul 12, 2019 8:11 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Broken Homes
Replies: 12
Views: 169

Re: Broken Homes

Enjoyed the progressions - sometimes/some/most - the hauntings, the sudden destructiveness, the gradual neglect.

My suggestion for S2 :
 a sideways glance and an off key tone
of voice inquiring about a preference
for Chinese or Italian,
never decided.
best

Phil
by Matty11
Sun Jul 07, 2019 5:15 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: the music of cows
Replies: 10
Views: 247

Re: the music of cows

Like it Dave. The concluding reality check is set up by the imagined analogy. I did struggle with the cowboy hat because that brought another cultural baggage. 'true rhythm' is a perfect note to end on. A blunt title 'cows' works for me since the poem doesn't need a signpost for its content. cheers ...