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Prompt#3  Write a poem that is really a love letter to an old flame. To make sure it’s doesn’t slip into sappy, make sure one or more of these words are in the poem: dung beetle, politician, nuclear, exoskeleton, oceanography, pompadour, toilet   Dear Tracy,             So glad to get your note! An...

Today's Monostich

The Mind, and Writer's Block

Lots of unsecured thinking. Make some lists.


 4/3/2019

A bee just buzzed by. Never heard him knock.

Good advice on your opening. A couple of things to consider: the over use of (I), especially in the last stanza, as well as line lengths, and the words lines end on. The last word in a line needs to be interesting; it needs to complete the intent of the line. I like the thought of being  Tucked away...

A couple of thoughts on line endings, Colm. A very nice piece.  Maggie Black and beautiful, its new leather aroma induces a slow nasal intake, an open-mouthed exhale, almost audible, almost a mantra. Too fast for laughable limits and too expensive, but sometimes we get our measurements wrong or forg...

Not rude at all, Tim; I just don't a need to feed an ego that thinks it knows everything about writing poetry any longer. And because words have meaning, Tim, I've made a copy of every edit and suggestion I have made on poems, and their ensuing conversations, over the years, including all of yours. ...

mfwilkie  wrote:  ↑ Tue Feb 20, 2018 9:40 am true, tim, but you still need to hear/see an error before revising it, don"t you think? and you already know I speak to your muse's ear, and not to you. Reading your explanations for word choices is a bit puzzling to me, because a young perspective could...

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true, tim, but you still need to hear/see an error before revising it, don"t you think? and you already know I speak to your muse's ear, and not to you. Reading your explanations for word choices is a bit puzzling to me, because a young perspective could also display those items, be appreciative of ...

Eye glasses, a red Life Saver, one brass house key,  a dog-eared Dickinson:  Tim, is it all of these items on the table washing over your evening, or just Em's? words washing me over another evening.  a thought: eye glasses and a house key, one red Life Saver and a dog-eared tome of Dickinson ever a...