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Really? You 're under the impression I counted the syllables while writing the poem? When have I ever written metered poems? I counted them post-write/your comment about artificiality, and mentioned it to indicate that it's not a real form poem other than the line lengths, my little idiosyncrasy. I...
- Wed Jan 16, 2019 9:04 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: a flock of breaths 1&2
- Replies: 15
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I enjoyed the read. Nice ephemeral feel to the piece with some original phrasing. The A flock of breath s and a flurry of images lines seem a little tangled around the plural/singular aspects although you have it grammatically correct. But I like the dreamy, thoughtful tone and the piece as a whole ...
Hm. If you didn't notice the form initially, that's a good indication the form is subordinate to the content. I don't force anything - the first three lines fell into place quite naturally with regard to what I wanted to say - basically a part-condensation of the philosophies of Sonia Ricotti and Ec...
Loved the title but the poem disappointed. The first line perplexed me, chronometer-wise, and then the middle sounded like a basic narcissist/empath thing going on and the ending plain jarred. Sorry if this seems unfair because I don't get it.