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by Mark
Wed Jan 23, 2019 7:44 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Mostly
Replies: 11
Views: 1019

Re: Mostly

Really? You 're under the impression I counted the syllables while writing the poem? When have I ever written metered poems?  I counted them post-write/your comment about artificiality, and mentioned it to indicate that it's not a real form poem other than the line lengths, my little idiosyncrasy. I...
by Mark
Mon Jan 21, 2019 7:57 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Mostly
Replies: 11
Views: 1019

Re: Mostly

Thanks - sorry, I've been offline for a few days. Glad to provide an insomnia cure. :roll:
by Mark
Wed Jan 16, 2019 9:04 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: a flock of breaths 1&2
Replies: 15
Views: 1332

Re: a flock of breaths 1&2

I enjoyed the read. Nice ephemeral feel to the piece with some original phrasing. The A flock of breath s and a flurry of images lines seem a little tangled around the plural/singular aspects although you have it grammatically correct. But I like the dreamy, thoughtful tone and the piece as a whole ...
by Mark
Wed Jan 16, 2019 7:13 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Mostly
Replies: 11
Views: 1019

Re: Mostly

Hm. If you didn't notice the form initially, that's a good indication the form is subordinate to the content. I don't force anything - the first three lines fell into place quite naturally with regard to what I wanted to say - basically a part-condensation of the philosophies of Sonia Ricotti and Ec...
by Mark
Tue Jan 15, 2019 9:22 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Mostly
Replies: 11
Views: 1019

Re: Mostly

Thanks Colm. Not actually meant to be dismal, more about being in the moment,focusing on the now...but in 4 slanty lines.  :?
by Mark
Mon Jan 14, 2019 12:56 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Mostly
Replies: 11
Views: 1019

Mostly

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Mostly

The past is pain
and the future is fear.
The present is everywhere,
and whenever is again too near.
by Mark
Tue Dec 11, 2018 9:36 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Harvest
Replies: 13
Views: 2907

Re: Harvest

Thanks for further comments. 
by Mark
Sat Dec 08, 2018 9:31 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: He Who Knows
Replies: 14
Views: 1235

Re: He Who Knows

Do they still make professors like that? Enjoyed the read, the piece is prosy but rhythmic. 
by Mark
Sat Dec 08, 2018 9:27 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: loose clockwork
Replies: 15
Views: 1413

Re: loose clockwork

The title's brilliant - imagine a Tom poem to follow. It made me expect some kind of a nutter but subtle - it does work for Ike's piece too.
by Mark
Fri Dec 07, 2018 9:16 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: loose clockwork
Replies: 15
Views: 1413

Re: loose clockwork

Loved the title but the poem disappointed. The first line perplexed me, chronometer-wise, and then the middle sounded like a basic narcissist/empath thing going on and the ending plain jarred. Sorry if this seems unfair because I don't get it.