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by Mark
Sun Apr 01, 2018 9:07 pm
Forum: Introduce Yourself Here
Topic: Hello
Replies: 5
Views: 7441

Re: Hello

Welcome, Marcel.
by Mark
Sun Apr 01, 2018 9:06 pm
Forum: Introduce Yourself Here
Topic: hello, Folks. You can't hide forever...
Replies: 6
Views: 3773

Re: hello, Folks. You can't hide forever...

Welcome Gyppo

Good to see you, man. Wishing you you a full recovery asap.
by Mark
Wed Mar 28, 2018 5:50 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: It's Just Laundry
Replies: 7
Views: 1672

Re: It's Just Laundry

Nice enough writing. Although not metered, there is sufficient cadence in the lines to support the end-rhyme structure. As you say, the content lends itself to bouncing along, and some poems claim their own manifestation.  
by Mark
Wed Mar 28, 2018 5:43 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: What is the Sound of an Elder Talking
Replies: 6
Views: 1427

Re: What is the Sound of an Elder Talking

Quite a canvas. On one level there is a sense of detachment that made this reader wonder how you feel about being part of the silent generation. Thanks to the internet, much has been exposed as a shell game of idolatry and hypocrisy. Yet one clings to the myths, don't we?  
by Mark
Wed Mar 28, 2018 5:33 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Story from the Silence
Replies: 12
Views: 2482

Re: Story from the Silence

Quite powerful if one desists from the weltschmerz of fictional violence. The poem is a reflection of reflections through the prism of time. The smaller details lend an authenticity that conveys pathos. An interesting read. PS is it not a trident?
by Mark
Wed Mar 28, 2018 5:26 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Radiant Heat
Replies: 23
Views: 3983

Re: Radiant Heat

An enjoyable read. The crafting is such that one is smoothly absorbed into the character's traits. Intrigue is key. Poetry in general does not lend itself to bald exposition, and nor should it; if different readers fill in the blanks between the high notes differently, then it succeeds as poetry, in...
by Mark
Wed Mar 28, 2018 5:16 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Isms
Replies: 26
Views: 4894

Re: Isms

Ah. Sometimes my sense of humour is not very sensible.
by Mark
Tue Mar 27, 2018 8:46 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Isms
Replies: 26
Views: 4894

Re: Isms

Thanks for commenting, Linda. Heysooz is the phonetic pronunciation of the Spanish first name Jesus (with accent) so not a Saffa thing. Think it's fine posted here. Just going to change one word to keep the bounce (and slant) going. 
by Mark
Wed Mar 21, 2018 10:11 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic:  Going Through All These Things Twice
Replies: 11
Views: 2238

Re:  Going Through All These Things Twice

A complex and edgy composition, and a pleasure to read. 
by Mark
Wed Mar 21, 2018 10:07 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: the nest new versions
Replies: 7
Views: 1620

Re: the nest

Yes, the eye count also made me pause but it doesn't matter - this like a a sliver of light through a barely cracked door and the back story is in shadow. A possible tweak.

Inside the frame
Maria's eyes rest.
I count on them for luck,
knowing summer is gone.