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Hi Colm I really like this on the whole. You do seem to dispense with the beautiful and humble question mark these days, which is odd. The two stanzas concerning what humans know in relation to the trees I personally would leave out as they alter the focus of the poem in a way that detracts from all...

the clothes she wore 
were not semaphore
nor invitation

his intentions
were neither response
nor acceptance

the result
not love
or sexy

bruises fade
the pain remains

I enjoyed the moment, not the feeling of panic. Reflects well on the writing.
Dave
 

I enjoyed this Colm. A pleasant read indeed.
Dave
 

Hi Colm It is all no big deal. However, let me clarify. I had nothing against posting the link. In fact without it I would not have got the poem. Secondly, and sadly what I meant was is that I found the story better than the poem. Thirdly, I understood what you were probably doing with the first sta...

Hi Colm While I love the story, I am going to be a dissenting voice about the poem. Without the accompanying story, I would not have had any idea about the poem itself. In fact I was quite confused about some aspects of the story it tells. The first stanza seemed to come from a more standard Colm po...

I very much enjoyed this Linda
Dave
 

Actually I felt the sadness was about how lost the mother was. The daughter seems to be strong, self-reflective and saddened by her mother rather than angry. There is a strong sense of the mother dying but unable to escape either herself, no matter how many forms she takes on, or this world. The ima...

Totally agree. They certainly liven up life in my garden