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Hi Marc,

Thanks for the read and tinker. I'll look at removing "backyard". I don't get what you mean by this:

The waterfowl pond is doomed. are doomed again all ear.

And drab has all the same letters as bard

I keep rereading this not knowing what it is that bothers me. At last I have identified it--its the use of the word "we". It would read so much better to me if the poem were written in first person singular. I, for instance, have never counted breaths or tears. I understand that you don't mean the c...

Thank you Mark and Phil, Yes indeed to:   They flourish like mushrooms.....................use Condo for the title? at the bottom of the canyon. Phils suggestion also addresses Mark's concern. There was a seven-drop waterfall that had to be contained by cement baffles in order for permits to build w...

Condos emerge like mushrooms at the bottom of the canyon. All day construction sounds vault my backyard fence.   The lagoon blocked seaside: east-end waterfalls are lost to flood baffle slabs. The waterfowl pond is doomed.   Two bedrooms, sea level, baking in a hole. 500 thousand each, price contro...

Explaining a poem seems to be no-no generally.

Oh, I apologize if I overstepped--I guess I imposed my take on your ending. However I do know why the N doesn't go outside (Minnesota---remember?)

Downstairs there are couches and afghans, Netflix on an oversized TV  I never watch. If I did, It’d be a show about nature, “Life in the Arctic”,  or, “Birds of the North”.   Hi Marc, I like that the N infers from the state of the tree branches that it is one of those nights--absolutely crackling c...

Yeah.

Well I can't blame my computer but you don't need to---got a good laugh from this one. Especially liked:

And faints at a distant hint of lightning

 

Oh My Gosh Catherine---I almost felt tears welling up watching those videos they are so inspiring. Thank you for sending them along. Amie I did the same thing on my bike to "Love is a Many Splendored Thing"  Bicycle Dancing---do you think there is such a thing? I'll look via YouTube. It could get to...