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Hello indar, I think your poem is very charming. It is a lovely mix of silliness and deep compassion.

built a flower-box buffet
of tasty blossoms.

I quite enjoy these two lines.

It was nice to read the article at the end and realize it was a true story. Thanks for sharing.

 

Hi Gyppo. Your affection for this woman and memory comes through nicely in the poem. It reads in a nice and casual manner for me, which I think is very fitting for a childhood memory. I'm not sure if the last stanza is needed, although perhaps it would end on too strong an image without it.

Hello Anna, this is a very creative and charming poem. You contrast the emotional undertones in the poem with wonderful effect. Its like a friend that knows how to tease.

I think you have done well with what you have written. Although I probably would have enjoyed it more if it was a bit longer.

Hi av, I really enjoyed your poem. I think the imagery and metaphors contrast each other very nicely. Also, the blend of reality and fantasy is very pleasant. I think a shorter or more condensed version could be interesting. Thanks for sharing.

Hello everyone, I am a poet in my early twenties. Although I am young, I hope you will find a welcome depth in my work. I am very impressed by the etiquette and talent of the community here, and look forward to participating.