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Hi and thanks Sharon 
So good to see you back here 
Looking forward to reading some of your fab poems soon 

The poem exists in S1. And it's a rather good stanza. The finish can be easily tidied up. My suggested edit would be something like this... Silence isn’t soundless. Lean in, listen it projects an awkward energy, and hums you to become your own audience. Embrace it, anchor yourself to its soundtrack....

Very nice Dave. 
Excellent imagery, and a clever title.
S4 might be stronger by omitting the first two 'the's.
 

Hi and Happy Thanksgiving aj. Reading the S1 I thought it was going to be a nonsense poem...sadly not  :( However, I did enjoy the read, but will have to wait till Christmas for my turkey. Hope you haven't gained too much weight  :) I do look forward to a time when we don't have to torture/kill/eat ...

Also late to this party  :oops: Wonderful poem Linda, and I wasn't offended by the adjectives...well I would say that, as I'm more than occasionally accused of abusing their use  :lol: I'm convinced that politicians, once a scandal is revealed, are more than happy for other misdemeanours to occasion...

The title works well; one meaning being someone who breezes through life without making too much effort.  'scribbled' in S1 reinforces the N's casual regard for Liz, as does the clipped/minimal text used in his note, and the fact he was too lazy to wash his mug before leaving. I can see one of his e...

Enjoyed the read Gyppo, and the 'trip' down memory lane 
 

He's a Shedless Wonder, a man for these modern times. 
Glad you liked it Gyppo.

In a shed, concealed under the Western Red Cedar deck I build 20 years ago, spiders hang or cling prolific. Cotton sacks bulge and decorate this damp, rotting nursery. Offspring to continue the lineage, or in leaner times, to consume. I should tear the whole thing down but a supporting deck beam col...

Thanks for reading Dave. I disagree (quelle surprise) that there's a poem trying to get out. I know it requires some editing...but not too much. L5 the 'fibres' shake...Collins Dictionary 'If you  say  that you  feel  something with every  fibre  of your being, you mean that you feel it very deeply....