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Linda. A difficult thing to build a poem around but this is well-presented with multiple levels of interpretation. The ending resonates with the human condition. 

Thanks for bumping this. A fine piece of writing, much enjoyed the simplicity and honesty.

Yeah. Fairly mainstream stuff. Now, the lipid nanoparticles in the mRNA shots... that's a deep dive.

Jingle

Can the Taliban topple Kabul?
C'mon man, yes they will
But wait, there's more
than rape and gore.





 

https://www.nebraskamed.com/COVID/moths ... cine-works
 

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I’m not taking the vaxx, fuck that,
rather wait for one made from
moth parts and tree bark;
gotta watch those LNPs.

Hm. Competent write but I suspect your calves are still protesting. Another indirect campaign in your personal war on entropy of the corpus via inhaling the trails in an ever increasing appetite of stamina vs gravity. Hm hm. Seems to tuck into this collective theme of displaying humility under exist...

Ike. I did enjoy this commentary. I think Colm called the gist of it accurately. In that sense, you capture your theme well. A brisk no-nonsense poem, nice job.  I'm afraid the ass-wiping line is the most memorable. I would suggest restructuring it to avoid ending it with with. I did a quick search ...

 It seems surprisingly difficult to produce urban poems. Dave. That observation of yours is what triggered my underworld poem post here.  :mrgreen: I agree with you, it's mostly flowers, waterfalls, sobbing moons and things of that ilk. Although, ironically, I do have an urban piece originally titl...

Phil. I actually have been following this piece through its iterations. Seemingly a reflection on the profound within the prosaic. Globally, I think people are craving simple normality, so I enjoyed the theme too. The revision is good. 

    Dave. I'm not sure I understand the form you mention. Blake is an interesting topic, though I'm not familiar with this particular struggle. I do like history, so that aspect beckons. The second line may have occurred, with the later Moorish occupation of Spain and conquest beyond, assuming Jerus...