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- Wed Sep 18, 2019 11:41 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Blood Blade
- Replies: 7
- Views: 4478
Re: The Blood Blade
Agree with @indar; confused but enjoyed it.
- Wed Sep 18, 2019 11:39 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Stories from the Silence#6: I Never Wore A Poodle Skirt
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3655
Re: Stories from the Silence#6: I Never Wore A Poodle Skirt
Love it.
1st stanza has fast Beat-like reading rhythm that'd be good for spoken word. Wish rest of the poem cont'd this.
1st stanza has fast Beat-like reading rhythm that'd be good for spoken word. Wish rest of the poem cont'd this.
- Mon Sep 16, 2019 1:02 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Blood Blade
- Replies: 7
- Views: 4478
Re: The Blood Blade
Nice lang/imagery!
Love "blue bird blazed"
Confused on the blood blade, but it shifts the poem darker?
Love "blue bird blazed"
Confused on the blood blade, but it shifts the poem darker?
- Mon Sep 16, 2019 12:43 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Stories from the Silence #5: Desert Mushroom 1957
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4050
Re: Stories from the Silence #5: Desert Mushroom 1957
So powerful!
At 1st confused how Joel connected with the Richfield High School, social studies class, but he's in the film, right? Perhaps you can make it clearer... like 17yr old students' reactions?
At 1st confused how Joel connected with the Richfield High School, social studies class, but he's in the film, right? Perhaps you can make it clearer... like 17yr old students' reactions?
- Mon Sep 16, 2019 12:29 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)
- Replies: 7
- Views: 6900
Re: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)
Very nice!
Love: "gleefully 'living on the edge'," and moon laughing.
Perhaps it can be more suspenseful, almost falling?
Love: "gleefully 'living on the edge'," and moon laughing.
Perhaps it can be more suspenseful, almost falling?
- Thu Sep 12, 2019 5:08 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Tuesday's Towers - Never Forget
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3913
Re: Tuesday's Towers - Never Forget
POV as a flight attendant'd be interesting too.
- Thu Sep 12, 2019 4:41 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: What the Person Holds (a rewrite to fit today's events)
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4848
Re: What the Person Holds (a rewrite to fit today's events)
Very well written. So true and sad! Seems to only be worsening...
Love the "and the glib, glittering gangs / and gangster" alliteration.
Love the "and the glib, glittering gangs / and gangster" alliteration.
- Tue Sep 10, 2019 6:01 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The rock
- Replies: 11
- Views: 8932
Re: The rock
Is the he in "God created big rocks.
He's cried desolate tears behind it
when young girls broke his heart," --> the farmer or God?
He's cried desolate tears behind it
when young girls broke his heart," --> the farmer or God?
- Tue Sep 10, 2019 5:56 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: I shouldn't be here: Written and spoken.
- Replies: 3
- Views: 3748
Re: I shouldn't be here: Written and spoken.
Funny. Love the flippant ending.
- Tue Sep 10, 2019 11:19 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Eamonn
- Replies: 10
- Views: 7882
Re: Eamonn
Like the contrasting images "imaginary pools" and "desert worlds." What makes unique people unique?