The Tangled Branch Discussion Forums

All power to you with your poetry site project, Maggie.

Welcome, ShortX - you know the recipe, add some white space to prose, a dash of purple, some lightly scrambled syntax, and go easy on the punctuation...pure poetry, man. 

Janet...from Texas? Yikes, it has been a long time. Great to see you, kiddo.

Hi julytimes - glad to see you made it over - Welcome  Mark (T).
 

Hi Maggie - good to see you here - bring your friends too .  Welcome, Mark T.

I'm thinking about how to fill in the last line blank... but what about cutting it... I long to move through smog, board that last train, take my seat and keep the best memories. The middle section is really well done, moody and atmospheric. We want the N to do what he has to, grasp the nettle, find...

Thanks for reading and kind comments, Daryl, Dave & Bev. I'm glad you enjoyed the piece.
Daryl, it's great to see you back in the mix after your sabbatical. Nice to see you posting again, Dave. And Bev - another blerrie Saffa - who let you in?

Nicely portrayed. S1 is quite powerful in its way. An enjoyable read and a respectable first outing. Critically, you sail almost too close to the wind with the alliteration but it does work. I agree with Sharon and Daryl about the ending and would reconsider the centre alignment and italics.  

The camera doesn't really do it justice, Sharon, but yeah. Snapped it when i was working late one day. Sometimes the sky looks like candyfloss. Thanks for comments Ty and Linda - I agree that line is a mouthful. It was actually quite a a struggle getting everything more or less arranged in this one,...

Oh boy, the Village People. I remember them... vibrant and fun poem, Linda. Shake that ass indeed.