Hello indar, I think your poem is very charming. It is a lovely mix of silliness and deep compassion.
built a flower-box buffet
of tasty blossoms.
I quite enjoy these two lines.
It was nice to read the article at the end and realize it was a true story. Thanks for sharing.
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- Sun May 06, 2018 1:39 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Wings of Another Kind
- Replies: 10
- Views: 7316
- Sun May 06, 2018 1:25 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Oboe - A childhood memory
- Replies: 5
- Views: 4423
Re: Oboe - A childhood memory
Hi Gyppo. Your affection for this woman and memory comes through nicely in the poem. It reads in a nice and casual manner for me, which I think is very fitting for a childhood memory. I'm not sure if the last stanza is needed, although perhaps it would end on too strong an image without it.
- Sun May 06, 2018 1:15 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: A Portrait
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4536
Re: A Portrait
Hello Anna, this is a very creative and charming poem. You contrast the emotional undertones in the poem with wonderful effect. Its like a friend that knows how to tease.
- Sun May 06, 2018 12:58 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: She Lives Anon
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5700
Re: She Lives Anon
I think you have done well with what you have written. Although I probably would have enjoyed it more if it was a bit longer.
- Sun May 06, 2018 12:49 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Brotherhood
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5742
Re: Brotherhood
Hi av, I really enjoyed your poem. I think the imagery and metaphors contrast each other very nicely. Also, the blend of reality and fantasy is very pleasant. I think a shorter or more condensed version could be interesting. Thanks for sharing.
- Sat May 05, 2018 7:42 pm
- Forum: Introduce Yourself Here
- Topic: Hello everyone
- Replies: 2
- Views: 9234
Hello everyone
Hello everyone, I am a poet in my early twenties. Although I am young, I hope you will find a welcome depth in my work. I am very impressed by the etiquette and talent of the community here, and look forward to participating.