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Nice CPian quattro!

Thanks for read and generous comments, Sharon, Marc and Catherine. The sea really does seem to have an inner light here sometimes and the sunsets can be ridiculous.

Superbly crafted. As good as anything I've read anywhere. I love the way the poem progresses so liltingly effortlessly - it's really good!

Just a thought on the opening if you are looking there:

Love, we are precarious,
wind weary, blasted,
spot-welded to the quick.

 

Tremblingly poignant but understated writing, Linda. The wealth of detail makes it easy to invest in this poem. My only nit is to look at the syntax of the last line in S4.

Moody and melancholic without self-pity. A requiem for a world perhaps unfound. I like this a lot, Marcus. Has a seasoned and mature tone that really appeals.

Welcome Bev.

brad & janet

. Luminosity   Sea-light draws me to the shore at dusk, cycling down streets I’ve never been before, petals below white villas stacked in avenues green with velvet lavender and plumbago blue, shaded bouquets unfolding the first scents of dew.     I slither to a halt in scrunching shells on sand. Ye...

The crafting is great - lot of effort to make it seem so effortless, I'm sure. Must be a real right brain - left brain thing for you here between the digital and the lyrical...

Ha ha cracker poem! I didn't count syllables but the internal read-beat bopped along just right, the cadence slick as cold beer on a hot day.  Great fun, enjoyed!
Erm, quite or quiet?