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Beautiful. Re-reading this I get such a sense of time and place, lovely control. I am quite taken with this poem.

Re-reading this... quietly beautiful piece. I also prefer V1, but I like V2's ending more...

Well, I've fiddled with it as a way of commenting but I have my doubts about my changes. It has a certain style stopping where it does as suggested by someone else too. But now another vital contrast is missing so I dunno. The TV programs. Somehow the poem manages to be sinister, in a subtle way. Ma...

Nicely done. An astute observation on progress in one's "back yard". My only suggestion would be to use another verb for the action of mushrooms; emerge perhaps, there's sense of mixed metaphor there, I think. The specifics really bring this into relief, it seems so real. Your neighbor's a silver li...

Just wondering about capitalizing the last line as a new sentence. Good, atmospheric writing, Catherine. I think the influence of English being a secondary language benefits your writing (you'll probably disagree) in terms of original phrasing and word choices as pointed out by gaviano. Whatever it ...

Thanks to gaviano, Linda, Marc, Sharon and Amie for reading and commenting on my first poem post here. This what it's all about, isn't it?  A big thanks to all who made this possible. The poem is an oldie, one of my first outings at MWC back in 2012 abouts. It's meant to be comedic and i usually la...

Great to see you here, Heidi. Please visit often.

Okay, so this is my test post in PYP. I have to say I don't like that there is no option but to have the title in the body of the page. I also don't fancy all that guff - name, date and time of post - hanging around under the title if it has to be there. I also don't seem to be able to create any wh...

My PC is a patch-up of bubblegum and string Creaky dial-up modem squeaks and squeals And faints at a distant hint of lightning My monitor needs a set of trolley wheels Don’t mention updates or anti-virus It will be quicker with quill and papyrus The fuzzy printer’s on the fritz again The manky mous...

Hope you don't mind , Linda -fixed that for you while practicing moderation. Mark.