Thanks Dave and Trev.
Still pondering how much to leave to the reader. The more space I fill in, the less space for the reader, which defeats the intended experience of the poem!
cheers
Phil
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- Sun Feb 28, 2021 1:11 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: On Becoming An Impressionist (revision3)
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- Sun Feb 28, 2021 9:06 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Room to Let
- Replies: 5
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Re: Room to Let
hi Trev I like the Eliot ref opening, but who is Jean-Marc? Either way was definitely drawn into the read. Perhaps the weariness needs some edge, some diction danger for more dynamic? best Phil Coffee spoons? No. I’ve measured my life in walls, fridges, questionable habits, houses shared like simmer...
- Sun Feb 28, 2021 5:51 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: On Becoming An Impressionist (revision3)
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5368
Re: On Becoming An Impressionist (revised)
Thanks Jackie. I've revisited to clarify, though not sure which revision to use
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Phil
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Phil
- Sat Feb 27, 2021 9:17 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: On Becoming An Impressionist (revision3)
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5368
Re: On Becoming An Impressionist
Thanks T and Linda. Pleased you enjoyed my 'puzzling' poem
all the best
Phil
all the best
Phil
- Sat Feb 27, 2021 9:02 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Memory Lane
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3277
Re: Memory Lane
Reading poets such as Eliot, however, make me want to just break my glasses and move on to the visual arts
- Fri Feb 26, 2021 11:52 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Cottonwoods
- Replies: 16
- Views: 5850
Re: Cottonwoods
Winter blew off Trotter's Hill so deep the ragged remains of cornstalks went under. Dad stopped going to work. Our house was empty during the day at night voices shouted in bedrooms. Mom gave Duke to a neighboring farm and the furniture to Goodwill. Looks fine to me Linda. Did you mean S6: I was se...
- Fri Feb 26, 2021 11:46 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: On Becoming An Impressionist (revision3)
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5368
- Fri Feb 26, 2021 11:36 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: The Second Coming Again
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3288
Re: The Second Coming Again
Yes, viewing from afar, it does feel so irrational and bizarre, a religious fervour, like evolution in reverse!
- Fri Feb 26, 2021 11:12 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Warmth in Cold Places (revised)
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4833
Re: Warmth in Cold Places (revised)
Thank you Trev. Very helpful. Lots of options for me to ponder on. All appreciated.
all the best
Phil
all the best
Phil
- Fri Feb 26, 2021 10:59 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Warmth in Cold Places (revised)
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- Views: 4833
Re: Warmth in Cold Places
Thanks T. That was my central intention. Pleased that came across.full of warmth and humanness.
cheers
Phil