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- Fri Oct 09, 2020 12:36 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Alone
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2848
Re: Alone
Like it Dave. Cleanly written, unfussy. The ending conveys a palpable sense of paralysis. Stasis for a title? I'd cut flurry of motion.
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Phil
- Thu Oct 08, 2020 9:01 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Collapsed on the Trail
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3700
Re: Collapsed on the Trail
Nice to see the aspens back Tracy! A lot of indefinite article in the middle of the poem, but you did convey a sense of place, which I muchly enjoyed.
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Phil
That's a great statement to pin a poem...and a life.I am here by choice
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Phil
- Thu Oct 08, 2020 8:31 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Rook
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3218
Re: Rook
Tracy Mitchell wrote: ↑Thu Oct 08, 2020 11:35 amAwesome images -- better I think than red wheel barrows and white chickens.
undoubtedly
thks T.
- Thu Oct 08, 2020 8:28 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Wave
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2111
Re: Wave
That was the intention, but the reading is open T.No wave no life washes up / but the Tshirt does not fit /the metaphysics shrink
Corrected the typo Colm.
Thanks both. I suspect the fun of this is in the doing rather than reading
cheers
Phil
- Wed Oct 07, 2020 9:42 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Wave
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2111
- Wed Oct 07, 2020 8:59 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Rook
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3218
Re: Rook
Thanks Dave. And Colm (a Trigger moment )
- Sun Sep 27, 2020 11:46 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Rook
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3218
Rook
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- Sun Sep 27, 2020 11:43 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Brighton
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2989
Re: Brighton
Amusingly observed Dave and yes, agreeing with Colm, that distraction, as always, is a survival strategy.
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Phil
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Phil
- Thu Sep 17, 2020 12:21 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Cling
- Replies: 4
- Views: 2713
Re: Cling
Felt you were playing with evolution in there Colm, as well as family, but in this narrative there is regression.
not to be found hiding - like that, difficult to cling to dignity when exposed and fear kicks in
enjoyed
Phil
not to be found hiding - like that, difficult to cling to dignity when exposed and fear kicks in
enjoyed
Phil
- Fri Sep 11, 2020 10:05 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: painting of a bullet hole
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2291
Re: painting of a bullet hole
An arresting title Dave, bone history sort of scary in that it's beneath the skin, not sure what splintered pane is referencing - the eye? The concluding realisation seems to point to both the empathy of feeling hurt and the consequence of hurting someone. Eirher way there's a loss of 'innocence' o...