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by Mark
Tue Feb 16, 2021 11:49 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Residue
Replies: 6
Views: 2812

Re: Residue

Adroit writing that offers an alternative perspective on the mundane. (I get through dishwashing by propping my phone on a shelf and listening to radio prank call recordings.)
I'm wondering about the plural/singular confusion in S3 with 'pan, dish and pot' ending as 'it'.
I enjoyed the read. Welcome. 
by Mark
Tue Feb 16, 2021 11:40 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Greens on Rice
Replies: 4
Views: 2146

Re: Greens on Rice

I'm not convinced about the form but it is a good narrative that flows well. Welcome.
by Mark
Tue Feb 16, 2021 11:36 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Lily
Replies: 4
Views: 2092

Re: Lily

Thoughtful writing with some great phrasing and imagery that create a palpable mood and tone. 
by Mark
Tue Feb 16, 2021 11:31 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Votive
Replies: 10
Views: 4101

Re: Votive

Evocative writing with plain language. This is good poetry. Welcome.  
by Mark
Mon Feb 08, 2021 1:30 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: My Turnip Patch
Replies: 11
Views: 4634

Re: My Turnip Patch

I can't say I like turnips but I like the poem. It seems to have been artfully constructed and for some odd reason makes me think of a 1950s spaceship crash-landed in a turnip field. This raises questions if not eyebrows. What are the farmer's neighbors going to think? Will the turnips go up or down...
by Mark
Fri Jan 15, 2021 1:26 am
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: The Gospel according to COVID
Replies: 30
Views: 12941

Re: The Gospel according to COVID

They've been moved elsewhere for further discussion in private.
by Mark
Fri Oct 30, 2020 3:32 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Shine on
Replies: 10
Views: 5216

Re: Shine on

Thanks Ty. Bit of a follow-up here - the Friday of the week that Japie died, with the funeral set for the following day, I showed the poem here to K while we were talking about Japie. She asked me to rework it into something more suitable for the occasion as a public offering. I declined that notion...
by Mark
Thu Oct 22, 2020 1:31 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Sticking with You
Replies: 4
Views: 2605

Re: Sticking with You

Funny but scary.
by Mark
Thu Oct 22, 2020 1:29 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Shine on
Replies: 10
Views: 5216

Re: Shine on

Thanks Dave. You are right, of course, the piece is flawed in that it is lacking the human element we sort of expect. All I can say is that's how it came out - I only met Japie a few times, he was K's friend more than anything, so.... And yes, distraught is overcooking it, I discarded it first time ...
by Mark
Wed Oct 14, 2020 4:09 pm
Forum: Post Your Poems
Topic: Shine on
Replies: 10
Views: 5216

Re: Shine on

Thanks guys - nice of you to comment when I show up without paying any dues. Sorry, things are just crazy-busy around here, work-wise - making hay-sunshine. The poem was done quite quickly too. Thanks for the suggestions, good ones, the fixes are in. I dropped the loose line as redundant. Japie - pr...