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Nooooooooooo-- it is the province and delight of the author, though occasionally stressing.

Very playful- the last line had me laughing.  No saguaro, indeed.  

 

Welcome Biola.  Glad to see you here.  I love your poetry - hope you settle in. 

T

Ha!  I've got a stack of mine which would hasten the process for you, if that's what you would want.  

Good comments about revisions, Colm.  I know had I read S. Version 2 first, I would have said don't touch it.  I very much like the V.1 opening.  After I read them both several more times, I am settled on V.1, without the first line: Tracing the Wild Atlantic Way, we drive with one aim we drive West...

Hi Tim, I go the erosion sense to this, but more, I  got the feeling that the  Dickinson poems were working over the Narrator like clothes being rubbed on a (real) washboard -- that his/her engagement with the poetry is the substantial element of his/her life, what is 'real' beyond time, aging, and ...

Nice attribution.

Janet -  How creative and unique.  I love your metaphor.  Yes, the feathers are soft, and this reference is so much more effective than invoking, for example, the eagle's mighty wing span, or powerful grip of the claws.  Subtle, powerful, effective. "talking space' - suggests 'taking space' - pacing...

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Tue Jan 30, 2018 2:45 pm

Have you noticed he writes under two names so he can get away with a second, illegal avatar?

Tom is the Admin - the b*st*rd  consumes a ton of screen time, doesn't let me near the keyboard for long stretches.  I'm the one who writes, and does reviews and comments.  Taint' fair.
 

St Johns on #63 -- gots to be Lutheran.  Just guessing - Lake City, Rochester? I recall being at a neighbor's funeral some years ago and talking with a guy in his 90's.  I commented that Olander [the deceased guy] had lost most of the trees in the grove protecting his farmhouse.  He responded that s...