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Hey Dylan I am a bit perplex with this one. It is great to see you posting here and your post before this was a pleasure. Humane, witty and insightful. This one less so. The topic itself is a bit worn - been around since the ancient Greeks - young people and their idea of culture, dreams of fame and...

In keeping with other years I am reworking a Poem from NAPO to see what happens. From a harmony  of green field and liquid sky cattle emerge one by one their heads like a melody  of semibreves, then crochets, glide down this rural page, demisemiquaver straight into and out of a trombone resting on a...

Thanks Matty for the two thumbs up and the pointer to the weakness of whispers. You are so right.

Dave

That's because it is such obvious fun.
Dave
 

Version 2 Water conjures life in a bottle lodged between hot stones; l ong abandoned ideas, abstract among dandelions and ivy.   He slips a twist of grass between his finger and thumb careful not to razor the skin and extracts a primal screech.   For no discernable reason he imagines a pomegranate, ...

An idle lad kicking a can along the lane that afternoon unnerved him. When in doubt, garden, she'd said. And so he did. Dug up a field, a pride of poppies. Spade work - he had the knack for it. The joy of labour sweated his ghosts until the mind hum bothered him not. I enjoyed the economy of the po...

An awesome Poem Tracy. Not a word wasted, sparse and atmospheric. Lovely Depth without effort and a fine unfolding of time and its effects. It leaves the emotional Response to the Reader. An exceptionally Beautiful composition.
Dave

This is simple, almost classical in style and lovely. Apart from removing the s from books I can 't think of anything to change. Funny how things disappear only to reappear much later from the depths.
Dave
 

A pleasant and typically well-told story. The main weakness if it is that is the fact that the ending is telegraphed way too early and so the enjoyment comes more from how well it is told than the actual 'punchline'.
Dave
 

Gentle and moving storytelling. It makes its point generously without resorting to a false cleverness.
Dave