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- Sun Feb 13, 2022 3:34 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Family Affair
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1723
Re: Family Affair
I would like to respond to the next draft
- Sun Feb 13, 2022 3:34 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Family Affair
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1723
Re: Family Affair
I would like to respond to the next draft
- Sat Feb 12, 2022 6:54 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Untitled
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1881
Re: Untitled
An interesting poem and set of comments. I get the feel that you are already re-drafting it, so will reserve any comments for the re-appearance of the poem. I like the first stanza and I like the rest of the poem, but i can't see a necessary connection between them. I take 'Notes... ' as a title.
- Sat Feb 12, 2022 6:47 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Menus
- Replies: 8
- Views: 1501
Re: Menus
HIIT cycles every evening to prolong the agony of living more repetitive cycles, and I still try harder every time! And all the while my Fitbit's soft rubber band handcuffs me to more unrealistic expectations. Cold showers after will stretch my time, so I'll linger longer in the bad zone where stra...
- Mon Feb 07, 2022 7:44 pm
- Forum: Introduce Yourself Here
- Topic: Hello
- Replies: 4
- Views: 12092
Re: Hello
Welcome!
- Sun Feb 06, 2022 10:27 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Funeral Fire
- Replies: 19
- Views: 3809
Re: Funeral Fire
I find giving comment awkward too and have been known to rub some people up the wrong way so I hope the thoughts are taken in the spirit they are meant - they seem to ahve been as your responses are measured, thoughtful and gracious. i certainly take it in the spirit you offered, which I take to be...
- Sun Feb 06, 2022 6:32 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Funeral Fire
- Replies: 19
- Views: 3809
Re: Funeral Fire
I remember black flowers, a low-slung coffin and priestly incantations. I stared at my boots as they buried their girl, killed in a car crash. Hello Bruise, Nice entrance into the branches. Wonderful entry into the poem. Thank you for the welcome and hello back. A very different reaction to the man...
- Sun Feb 06, 2022 6:29 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Funeral Fire
- Replies: 19
- Views: 3809
Re: Funeral Fire
Hey Bruise, Welcome to the site. Hope you get a lot out of it. Thank you for the welcome, and I already have! I thought there were some nice touches until I got to the last two verses. Up till then, the tone somehow seemed a bit off to me, lacking in something (I can't really explain it). I'd be in...
- Sun Feb 06, 2022 6:26 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Funeral Fire
- Replies: 19
- Views: 3809
Re: Funeral Fire
Hi Bruise and welcome, Thank you for the welcome, Dave, and hello back to you. As has been stated these are thoughtful and carefully put together poems. This is further confirmed by your responses to the comments. As has been already described they provide contrasting experiences of two funerals, o...
- Fri Jan 28, 2022 7:37 am
- Forum: The Commons
- Topic: Lineation
- Replies: 6
- Views: 9495
Lineation
Just an interesting article, i thought:
Dear Bad Writers, Read This Poetic Line Breaks Guide
The examples towards the end are good, i thought. The finger-wagging less good! What do you think?
Dear Bad Writers, Read This Poetic Line Breaks Guide
The examples towards the end are good, i thought. The finger-wagging less good! What do you think?