Enjoyed this G. The narrative carried me along, the tarot pack has its allure and you don't deny that, but the outcome carried the poignant fact.
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Phil
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- Thu Jul 02, 2020 3:56 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: When Eve flipped the tarot
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3495
- Fri Jun 05, 2020 11:43 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Between the lines, the endless lines of thought etc.
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3638
Re: Between the lines, the endless lines of thought etc.
The mother’s a virgin, that‘s what gets me every time. A virgin! imagine. A dusky white woman who believes in the arc of the stars and brightness at night, possesses the faith of refugees and the warmth of straw. Her son carves crosses from wood without a care in the world. The father’s boasts of d...
- Fri May 15, 2020 8:54 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Air
- Replies: 10
- Views: 6463
Re: Air
A drift of air, redirected. Channelled through ever smalling space, lifts to a breeze, carousels imps to surprise and ruffle hair. Lonely dogs imagine kindly hands, then utter faint disappointed barks. Yes, you could go more...or less...with just the above...or stay as is...either way the poem succ...
- Tue May 12, 2020 9:56 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: I Thought She Was A Goddess
- Replies: 13
- Views: 8381
Re: I Thought She Was A Goddess
Very much enjoyed this Linda. I like to find poems that have people, the relationships between people, find that kind of poem more real. Of course, the poetry needs to be there too, which is the case here, with that evocative moth imagery and the ceiling which is both tangible and spiritual. I read ...
- Mon May 11, 2020 7:06 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Flightless
- Replies: 9
- Views: 5758
Re: Flightless
Thanks Colm. Pleased you enjoyed and thank you for those edit options. Perhaps I should have stuck with the original, which was fine with me, but it has been accepted by a publication in the revised version.
all the best
Phil
all the best
Phil
- Fri May 08, 2020 12:15 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Tribes
- Replies: 14
- Views: 8307
Re: Tribes
from starved to starving
humbled to humbled,
Thank you for sharing this Colm.Your poem is an uplifting reminder of the humanity that does exist and will always exist. History threaded with outcomes that feed the good in people from generation to generation.
best
Phil
- Wed Apr 08, 2020 12:38 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Flightless
- Replies: 9
- Views: 5758
Re: Flightless
Thanks Dave. Like a fevered cough that couple's squabble I've had some trouble with that. Edited a tad. funeral feathered is a lovely phrase but the image is very close to cliche and does not reflect the general tone of the poem or ideas expressed therein about the crows One of the intentions of the...
- Tue Apr 07, 2020 10:54 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Flightless
- Replies: 9
- Views: 5758
Re: Flightless
Thanks for taking time from the NaPo Linda. Yes, crows are survivors and our noses pressed to the glass neatly reflects the perspective change!
cheers
Phil
cheers
Phil
- Sun Apr 05, 2020 8:22 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: sneezing
- Replies: 13
- Views: 8788
Re: sneezing
The title caught my eye Dave. Interesting stuff, though S3 delivers the poetry.
Just a suggestion.
best
Phil
I stand on a street corner at night.
The sky has found its stars
while the air circulates in cool currents.
I listen hard for the rising bile
of daily life but hear only echoes.
Just a suggestion.
best
Phil
- Sun Apr 05, 2020 8:11 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Flightless
- Replies: 9
- Views: 5758