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Hey Greg Your poems continue to be absorbing, intelligent and imaginative. I would still consider the number of modifiers you employ. The poem moves both physically and emotionally whne you use strong verbs rather than adjectives though some work excellently as in line "honeyed". Sometimes I think y...

A poem from Fives November now open for comment: in the original and then modified forms Weather original   Striped glass fills a huge blue void; rain from a clear solid sky breaks expectation into lightning shards.  Clouds smile along, shaped as folds in a sunfilled down of feathers. Wet music runs...

Hey Greg This is a mixed bag for me with lines I like a lot, such as the opening line, which is highly original and other lines which to me to be both telly and clichéd. I have little idea who Nathaniel is or was but am guessing someone biblical. So, my thinking on this. Great first lines followed b...

I agree with Colm: a personal, confessional romantic poem that works really weel. Touching and sensual. Good writing

Hey Colm
Atypical Colm piece in the best sense, playful, meaningful and with an easy way with words and pictures. Nicely done

Hey Greg
The five poems in five days is on another thread here on the site called fives and runs from the fifth of every month til the nineth. As for posting a second poem too soon, not sur ewhy unless it is felt yout comment on others' poems before doing so. However, I noticed you did comment. 

Hey Greg As my Irish friend said this is an excellent start. Perhaps a tad overly poetic for some but perfectly well formed for others. There is scope for exploring other wordings perhaps as ome are close to cliché, though fitting to the style here. (shing golds, splendour and winter's encasement. I...

Simple clear and sweetly playful. Nice write.
The grey squirrals came from America to Europe and bullied the reds follwed by Black squirrals bullying the greys. A funny lot.

Exceptionally good Linda. As Gyppo says wonderfully visual.

You are right of course Mark.