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- Sat Jul 13, 2019 1:21 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Cycle
- Replies: 8
- Views: 7662
Re: Cycle
Aah yes, turnip-speak. Good quad there, Ty.
- Sat Jul 13, 2019 1:10 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Grandpa's Row Boat
- Replies: 6
- Views: 5008
Re: Grandpa's Row Boat
Very nicely done. I suggest reconsidering ' hissing' as a bit cliche. Also, revisit 'wood steps' for possible modification.
my line of the poem, excellent
a boat wood-ribbed like the inside of a fish,
my line of the poem, excellent
a boat wood-ribbed like the inside of a fish,
- Sat Jul 13, 2019 1:01 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Broken Homes
- Replies: 13
- Views: 9856
Re: Broken Homes
Even better on the re-read. Melancholic and evocative. Quad for you.
Bleached
I listen for nostalgia in his footsteps
down a lane from the railway station,
past a red roof house slammed shut
on the blue collar side of the tracks.
Bleached
I listen for nostalgia in his footsteps
down a lane from the railway station,
past a red roof house slammed shut
on the blue collar side of the tracks.
- Sat Jul 13, 2019 12:51 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: derelict home
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6493
Re: derelict home
Strong writing, with a complex pace within a well-drawn atmosphere.
- Fri Jul 12, 2019 5:46 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Tweak from the Napo 19 file
- Replies: 6
- Views: 5370
Tweak from the Napo 19 file
. Positive ions and negative icons I am a servant of the sun. I meditate in its rays. In the collective memories beyond the windows, I roam in the files of my mind, seeking paradoxes of enlightenment. I sense kindred beings on quests for understanding, a questioning of the questions. Our environmen...
- Fri Jul 12, 2019 5:20 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Broken Homes
- Replies: 13
- Views: 9856
Re: Broken Homes
Thanks for that clear and informative article, Matty.
- Fri Jul 12, 2019 6:43 am
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: More
- Replies: 10
- Views: 8972
Re: More
Ha, I probably did spend more time on it than you, with my proofreader's eye. Enjoy your break in Arabia.
- Wed Jul 10, 2019 5:43 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: More
- Replies: 10
- Views: 8972
Re: More
Some alarms are sensed, an internal twitch we should hear but don't, or refuse to. 'an internal twitch' is the main subject of the stanza. It can be sensed as an alarm, something that should be heard, refused to be heard, or not heard. The sense of a twitch as being auditory isn't a natural connec...
- Wed Jul 10, 2019 3:37 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: Cycle
- Replies: 8
- Views: 7662
Re: Cycle
Thanks for read and comments, guys. A Napo 2018 retread.
- Sat Jul 06, 2019 3:04 pm
- Forum: Post Your Poems
- Topic: the music of cows
- Replies: 11
- Views: 9822
Re: the music of cows
Well, the ending couplet of the piece is unique in poetry annals in that it conveys imagery of a cow swatting flies off its arse with its tail. Remarkable writing. And indeed, this is an honest image of cattle. Conversely, the rest seemed romanticised to me but then I know cows.