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How can you make your Big Picture a tad more obvious? I don't know Jackie. I tried some title changes: wealth the priority being the car rather than the climate. The extreme weather  indicated no animal/bird ventures forth and a pointlessness in the activity ie so extreme that all the roads are clo...

I thought and were a natural couple

Marvelously inventive as always Jackie. Not just an 'inscape' of objects, but an internalised experience of object... left bent as it were. I enjoyed the straightening in my mind, righting the weight experience to meaning. The reader constraining with a brace. L1 locked me into the world of secondha...

Many will relate to the viewpoint Trev.

Tracy's suggestion could be an option.

I do feel it needs some more colour to progress.

cheers

Phil

Thanks Trev and T. I intended this to be a climate change poem. Extreme weather (the pivot lines of cat/birds to imply this). The title relates to what we value ie cars. I was hoping the fact the snow is so deep there would be no clearing of roads. Hence the puzzlement... and perhaps a reflection by...

Thanks Deb for the points. Yes, humour on the outside looking-in

cheers

Phil

Thanks Colm. The weather I fear here are the winds. We needed a roofer this week. Mr Tiley!

cheers

Phil

gone to publ land

Enjoyed Linda. Keys into the comforts of cooking, routines, familiarity; the rewards of taking time to learn rather than idle. There was warmth in the poem. Details like the loyalty to the little pan and the co-op shop; the shift from campsite to home; the craft of adding, stirring, mincing and bein...

When you feel that life is hard and the ingrowing toenail is getting large, or that eggy odour begins to follow you around the playground, and you don't kick the ball because your toenail is getting large, or feeling your girlfriend will dump you like a bad smell... always remember this: it could b...