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Thanks for checking it out and giving it some thought, Dave and Tim! I'll pass on what you said

Ike

Hi linda, Thanks for reading and mulling it over! Not so much a real eclipse as something/someone thats beautiful for a bit, but then hurts. The neanderthals were smart enough to look away.  I assume we become as Neanderthals despite the scientific explanation in the presence of a phenomenon so spec...

(this is a friend who wanted feedback's piece-title and all) I’ve always thought my life did not begin when I was born. Reality may be unverifiable, objective truth might be malleable. I was told the name I’d call on my deathbed, I call that name every night. And I don’t believe anymore. Death is d...

Hi Colm, This one seems like it might be too internal for the reader to truly grasp but I think that's OK. For the first stanza I prefer "I walk on fragments. The pavement shifts, Sometimes." My edit might not align with your intention though. Also, I like the line "unsettled by its indecision" this...

Hey Dave, First off, sorry if you're going through or something has happened recently. I like the question in the middle, personally. Since their voice is gone its as if the question is directed at N's self as a bit of introspection. The lines "you long since lost a taste for this nonsense. " and "P...

Hi Wren,  I don't think I've seen you around yet, but I look forward to reading what ya've got. Thanks for taking a look at this. Getting rid of the passive voice is a good idea, I didn't even notice that I used it. I see what you mean about "sweep them" vs "sweep the onlookers" but the timing of "s...

Colm, Thanks for the read and I'm glad you like it. The title does come off sort of stale to me as well, but I felt like the obscurity of the piece needed me to point the readers in a certain direction (i imagine theres a more eloquent way to do that). Are you referring to the Apollo and 'of spectat...

Tim,  You mentioned that you're disinterested in the cosmological aspect of this as a philosophical allusion (well, that's what I took from what you said) but the whole bit is a sort of spectral veneer, that aspect isn't meant to be delved into too much. I am a little confused of the facts that you'...

Hey Phil, Right off the bat, I'm intrigued by the title- definitely alludes to multiple meanings. I agree that this a cool new style for you, regardless of whether an experiment goes how you predict, you learn new things. I'm not sure what is trying to be emphasized by N in each line, but some of th...

Hey Matty,

You're absolutely spot on about N, and I appreciate your response.

Ike