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Climbing (revised)
Re: Climbing
Thanks AT. Sounds are not absent rather they are not what they seem...don't believe everything you hear
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Phil
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Phil
Re: Climbing
I read this as 'just' a poem about climbing.
Dusting the blister...is a fab S. The chalk (and mental chalk) easing the challenge.
I'm not a climber, but have climbed, and enjoyed this lots...especially the last S.
Dusting the blister...is a fab S. The chalk (and mental chalk) easing the challenge.
I'm not a climber, but have climbed, and enjoyed this lots...especially the last S.
Re: Climbing
Thanks Colm. I'm not a 'climber' either, but I do like a hike up a hill (in this case the poem relates to walks 'climbing' Pen-Y-Fan and Snowdon)
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Phil
Re: Climbing (revised)
Still prefer the original.
'comma'd' is the only snag for me?
'comma'd' is the only snag for me?
Re: Climbing (revised)
Thanks for taking another look Colm. Yes, comma'd is an opinion divider.
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phil
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phil
Re: Climbing (revised)
Sorry M, still prefer the original.
Re: Climbing (revised)
Thanks for taking another look AT and Colm. One of those I'll probably revise endlessly!
cheers
Phil
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Phil
Re: Climbing (revised)
Actually you now have 3 good poems. I prefer the original and comma'd is a stumbling point. It's almost like another poem suddenly intrudes