Re: Flies Die By The Windows
Posted: Tue Dec 04, 2018 7:54 pm
Very expressive AT.
I thought that translated the mind state.
The 'internalised' voice of this story may interest:
https://www.gutenberg.org/files/5200/5200-h/5200-h.htm
cheers
Phil
I find that kind of expression overwrought.insecurities throbbed in waves.
I don't find any surface logic in that (detracts from any intended metaphor)and they always die by the windows
where the air is freshest.
Sounds like you're trying to be poeticUnder the murky glow
of the new moon.
Tireless buzzing
under pillows, faint tapping against glass.
I thought that translated the mind state.
The 'internalised' voice of this story may interest:
https://www.gutenberg.org/files/5200/5200-h/5200-h.htm
cheers
Phil