Fear is a Fruit

[Tracy Mitchell]

Sorry to take so long in getting back. Thanks all for the fine feedback.

Colm - yes, the repeats probably don’t work very well. I like how they read aloud, but don’t add to the narrative. I’ve seen you on Youtube – you don’t show any fear of public speaking, on the contrary, you show mastery.

Marc - I think you are right about “the”. It was one of the poem’s last edits and it wasn’t a good one. Form? Nope. Reading out loud? Yes, this poem was constructed orally before reduced to writing.

Dave – Good eye for detail, with the vines observation. It is good to know how disjointed this seems to you. I agree with removing the S.1 comma as well. Good catch

Indar – I thought comets because these giant slushballs have lit the night sky with omens and portents and prophesy and other divine and celestial messages. Thanks for taking a look.

Phil – I like your take on this.

Thanks everyone for reading and engaging. I appreciate your effort and the FB.

Cheers.

T

[Deb]

Fruit is sweet, So is fear in an inconceivable way. Show us that fear.

[Deb]

Fruit is sweet, so is fear in an inconceivable way. Show us that fear. 

Okay, I must admit I wrote that after two cocktails last night. 

It seemed profound at the moment but now it sounds kind of, meh. 

I'm with Colm on the repeats. I think you could do more with this concept and the base you have.

That's my opinion, for what it's worth, but I'm not a scholarly poet by any means. Take what I say with a grain of salt or not at all. 

~Deb

[Tracy Mitchell]

I think you have a good point, Deb. Thanks for reading and posting. This poem is largely meant for reading aloud, which is no explanation for anything.