Daughter I never had,
tugging my arm-sleeve
hanging heavy as an anchor
rooted to the tip of my tongue.
I toss restlessly in half
sleep, a boat captain
throwing a lifeline, towing
you gently through my dreams.
by George
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Jennifer, Not Here
Re: Jennifer, Not Here
Oh Binx,
what a beautiful poem--all I can say is: I love it.
what a beautiful poem--all I can say is: I love it.
Re: Jennifer, Not Here
It has taken quite a few reads to really enter into the world of the poem but i am getting there. Is there any advantage poetically to calling a sleeve an arm- sleeve, which i admit is an expression i have never heard.
Re: Jennifer, Not Here
Am glad you entered, Dave. Stay awhile. Arm-sleeve is more common than you think.
by George
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Re: Jennifer, Not Here
This is wonderful, George. Beautiful.
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Re: Jennifer, Not Here
Thank you, Tracy.
by George
Re: Jennifer, Not Here
Enjoyed this George. Inventive (especially L4). The line break in L5 rather snaps the line, though I presume the intention was to reflect the sense of 'half'. If the latter, the device feels contrived in such a heart-felt write.
best
Phil
best
Phil
Re: Jennifer, Not Here
Hi, Phil. Thanks for the suggestion. Not getting that same contrived feeling here.
But thanks. Happy other things seem to get your attention in the right way.
by George