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Triolet 24

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Lecram06
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Triolet 24

Post by Lecram06 » Wed Apr 24, 2019 8:23 am

Triolet 24

Noise, a stone weighted down.
Light, a knife slicing in the dark.
Wind, a dervish on the mound.
Noise, a stone weighted down
Rushing all over town . . .
Everything a lark.
Noise, a stone weighted down.
Light, a knife slicing in the dark.
 

ajduclos
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Re: Triolet 24

Post by ajduclos » Sat Apr 27, 2019 2:43 pm

Wow, Marcel - a third place to find your poems !!!!!!!
Aj  

Matty11
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Re: Triolet 24

Post by Matty11 » Thu Jun 13, 2019 2:27 am

Some nice lines, but I feel the poem would benefit from more symmetry such as equally stressed lines.

best

Phil

indar
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Re: Triolet 24

Post by indar » Fri Jun 14, 2019 11:31 am

Haven't heard from Marcel lately: I assume he is off getting his chapbook of triolets ready for print-----

ajduclos
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Re: Triolet 24

Post by ajduclos » Fri Jun 14, 2019 11:36 am

Hi Indar -

He is quite busy, juggling more than on project.  He says he will post here soon.

Aj

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