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starving the breath
Posted: Wed May 15, 2019 7:24 am
by Dave
Spokes in the wheel spin,
she squeals, a blur of arms
and silk, head back, mouth
starving the breath of name:
captured in the picture
I now hold - time’s blank
voiceless charade, a scene
I can mime like a cheap actor
who draws shapes and echos
from a glaze of chemicals.
Re: starving the breath
Posted: Wed May 15, 2019 8:45 am
by indar
I can mime like a cheap actor
who draws shapes and echos
from a glaze of chemicals.
This almost took my breath away Dave. What an eloquent statement of the power of image. Beyond that the distance between the physical make-up of the object and the reality it represents to the N kind of points out the reality of the religious object, the power of symbol. I love it of course.
Spokes in the wheel spins,
Is the above grammatically correct? Should it be "spokes spin"?
Re: starving the breath
Posted: Wed May 15, 2019 10:09 am
by Dave
Thanks Indar. Yes of course it is a typing/Grammar error.
Photos are funny aren't they?
Re: starving the breath
Posted: Sun May 19, 2019 8:56 am
by indar
Photos are funny aren't they?
Yes. Maybe they are what really separates us from other species in the animal kingdom.
Re: starving the breath
Posted: Thu Jun 20, 2019 3:52 pm
by Tracy Mitchell
Thought provoking! In a good way.
One small nit to pick – in Line 1 “spins” should be “spin”. The subject is “spokes” and spokes spin.
This appears to be a snippet recollection by the Speaker as s/he looks at a photo. S.1 describes what he sees in the photo and S.2 describes his reaction – regret for sure, perhaps a bit of bitterness, if only for the passage of time.
Thanks for posting.
Cheers.
T