Spittlebugs
My words come thick and fast,
their speed and expressiveness
fills the air with devastation,
this stormbringer tosses truth
out with the broken future -
such is the art of a lie.
I hold still,
time to see
clear contours through the blur.
and there they are:
spittlebugs on your lip,
and I know you're safe.
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Spittlebugs
Spittlebugs
Last edited by Dave on Thu Jul 25, 2019 4:50 am, edited 1 time in total.
Re: Spittlebugs
Egads, Dave--I looked up spittlebugs. This is one harsh piece of writing. Well-written, effective but heart-breaking.
Re: Spittlebugs
Nice read Dave.
Interesting use of spittle.
Typo on last line? 'You're'
Interesting use of spittle.
Typo on last line? 'You're'
Re: Spittlebugs
Thanks Indar - perhaps harsher than meant - maybe a result of the edit from the NAPO version.
Thanks Colm for the comment of the typo - so obvious and so silly.
Dave
Thanks Colm for the comment of the typo - so obvious and so silly.
Dave
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Re: Spittlebugs
Awesome narrative hits like a full-open water hose.
Stunning closing lines.
Wow, and bravo.
T
Stunning closing lines.
Wow, and bravo.
T
Re: Spittlebugs
Why spittlebugs? Because they suck plants' sap, like draining a soul?
https://www.nytimes.com/2019/02/19/scie ... -home.html
Guess last stanza confuses me.
https://www.nytimes.com/2019/02/19/scie ... -home.html
Guess last stanza confuses me.