An Arabian Wedding

Post by **Colm Roe** » Wed Jul 24, 2019 7:06 pm

Cocooned, or so we thought,
but we were drawn in.

Saw the colours before the barriers fell,
felt the silk's infusion, and
sensed its ability to bring nature inside.

The whole room was wrapped.

They were introduced from the centre,
close family first,
a slow procession of more distant relations
then friends,
spun out
in an ever expanding web.

Flowers and gold
rituals, incense and strange sounds
infused their ancient spells.

It was only when the marriage was over
we realised
we'd left our shoes outside.

Dave · Post by **Dave** » Thu Jul 25, 2019 4:45 am

Havng been to an Afghan wedding I can really relate to this. it leads the reader in nad wraps the image around them - nicely done and great finish.
Dave

Post by **indar** » Thu Jul 25, 2019 9:02 am

Saw the colours before the barriers fell,
felt the silk's infusion, and
sensed its ability to bring nature inside.

The whole room was wrapped.

Outstanding! Nice play on "wrapped" "rapt". Describes the whole poem

Post by **Colm Roe** » Thu Jul 25, 2019 7:09 pm

Thanks guys.
Humbled by your approval. We arrived home yesterday morning, so no sleep last night...but I had to put something down before I slept. Thinking I might lose some sense of the experience.
So it's a bit rough around the edges.
I'll try to post a few that give a better sense of the awe we felt...and will probably feel for a long time!

Gyppo · Post by **Gyppo** » Fri Jul 26, 2019 3:51 am

Colm,

Sometimes 'rough around the edges' captures the mood better than too much polish.

Thanks for this glance into a world most of us will never see.

Gyppo

Post by **Tracy Mitchell** » Sat Jul 27, 2019 8:44 am

This poem welcomes me into its layers. You make the extended metaphors feel natural, a part of the gestalt. Wonderful poeming, and as Dave says, great finish.

T

Post by **Colm Roe** » Sat Jul 27, 2019 6:50 pm

Thanks for your comments and appreciation Gyppo and Tracy

Post by **Tracy Mitchell** » Sun Jul 28, 2019 7:32 am

I forgot to say that your opening line is tremendous. I have been focusing on this recently because its importance just cannot be overstated, and Colm you have a mastery of getting that first line just right, time and again.

Cheers.

T

Post by **Colm Roe** » Sun Jul 28, 2019 5:52 pm

Thanks T

ajduclos · Post by **ajduclos** » Tue Jul 30, 2019 8:43 am

Colm, there really is nothing I can add to the comments... except perhaps WOW !!!!! "Wrapped" I am. You had me even before the first line ended. And wonderfully bookended by the closing line.

Aj

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