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One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

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Gyppo
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One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

Post by Gyppo » Sun Aug 11, 2019 3:35 pm

The experiment continues.  This comes from the same holiday as
The Clifftop Drummer.

This time you get the sound file and the written words.

https://soundcloud.com/user-593821894/o ... ne/s-f2k4q

One night in June

Climbing a cliff in the moonlight
gleefully 'living on the edge',
although, to be honest,
it's not that risky.
A route so familiar
after fourteen days of freedom
I could climb it blindfolded. 

One last scramble before
I go home tomorrow,
to be a responsible citizen again
for the next fifty weeks. 

Surf pale in the moonlight
many feet below.  Magic!
Then it rains.
Only a fine drizzle,
but the secure gritty holds
are now a slippery paste.

The rain passes
but the slip remains.
My worn plimsolls
squirm against the restless surface. 

I balance, suddenly aware of the risk, 
take off the treacherous footwear, 
stuff them into my shirt
and climb barefooted,
losing skin on sharp edges,
but finding the vital grip 
to reach the top safely.

I lay on the wet grass of the path
whilst the full moon laughs at me.
One day, I know, this will told
as a great adventure.
But right now I know otherwise.
I've been living beyond the edge
where fortune, sometimes, favours fools.

Gyppo

 
I've been writing ever since I realised I could.  Storytelling since I started talking.  Poetry however comes and goes  ;-)

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Re: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

Post by ajduclos » Mon Aug 12, 2019 12:52 pm

Gyppo - another nice one... great story, great reading....  It would seem you've got that mic and the DAW sorted.

And I think being a fool is the only reason I've lived to this day.

Aj 

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Re: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

Post by indar » Fri Aug 16, 2019 4:25 pm

I will forever read your poems differently now that I've heard you :)

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Re: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

Post by Gyppo » Fri Aug 16, 2019 6:04 pm

Is that a plus or a minus? ;-)  Or just at odds with what you've always heard in your own head when reading my written words?

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Re: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

Post by indar » Fri Aug 16, 2019 6:52 pm

A definite plus. The pitch of your voice and cadence of speech is now fixed in my brain. You are a troubadour. 

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Re: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

Post by Gyppo » Fri Aug 16, 2019 9:58 pm

A troubadour?  A compliment indeed.  [Doffs his plumed hat and delivers a sweeping bow to the Lady.]

Maybe in a previous life I was.  Or a wandering storyteller.

I can be as shy and nervous as the next man before I get started, but once I'm 'performing' a different personality takes over.

Gyppo
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Re: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

Post by ajduclos » Fri Aug 16, 2019 11:33 pm

Ya, Gyppo - I totally get it !!!!!!!

Aj

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Re: One Night in June. (The spoken experiment continues.)

Post by poet-e » Mon Sep 16, 2019 6:29 pm

Very nice!

Love: "gleefully 'living on the edge'," and moon laughing.

Perhaps it can be more suspenseful, almost falling?

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