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poet-e
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Raven (2nd in Searching for Kadesh collection)

Post by poet-e » Wed Sep 25, 2019 3:00 pm

Feathers fully covered in ashes ruffle in the wind.
No sackcloth.  Black, as crisp as a clear night.  Almost

like my blood browned, once cream dress, tattered and torn,
aged eroding by the elements…only darker.

What happened that you only use one foot
to hobble on, instead of walking straight on two?

Why couldn’t He have given me wings
to soar, like you do, like all birds do?

Deep bottom of the sea eyes glistening darkness—
a moonlightless night with dancing shadows.

You don’t seem to care that you can’t walk
well, with your chest proud, preaching perching on the branch above me.

I didn’t think it mattered much that I cannot walk, until
I crash landed, living under this tree.

Dagger claws that could rip my eyes
out…at least one of us would eat.

Couldn’t your ancestor find an olive leaf for Noah?
Where did he go when the water dried up from the earth?

Cah cah cries.
Do you even know that

you and your kind
are unclean?[1]  Unclean.

Why would He make us—the unclean?


[1] According to Blu Greenberg (author of On Women and Judaism: A View From Tradition and How to Run a Traditional Jewish Household), traditional Jewish views of “uncleanness” are misinterpreted and are better understood as purity laws and rituals.  Jodi Magness explains in “Jesus and His Jewish Influences” (a 2015 Great Courses Audio series) that people in Jesus’ time were for the most part in continual uncleanness, except for priests during their temple stays.  However, Searching for Kadesh examines uncleanness more from the context of exclusion and as a literary device.
 

indar
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Re: Raven (2nd in Searching for Kadesh collection)

Post by indar » Wed Sep 25, 2019 4:22 pm

Oh how funny I brought this up in a response to your "who is He poem without having looked at your next post.

Matty11
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Re: Raven (2nd in Searching for Kadesh collection)

Post by Matty11 » Thu Sep 26, 2019 12:48 pm

What happened that you only use one foot
to hobble on, instead of walking straight on two?
Like that image/question, do they hobble or hop?
Feathers fully covered in ashes ruffle in the wind
I feel there is more dynamic to the line without fully.

cheers

Phil
 

poet-e
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Re: Raven (2nd in Searching for Kadesh collection)

Post by poet-e » Fri Sep 27, 2019 9:07 am

Thanks.

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