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Deb
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Re: Ink

Post by Deb » Tue Jan 07, 2020 9:09 pm

Colm, I really like this. It speaks to me on many levels.

Have you played with changing up "good parent" once in the last S? 
Perhaps, attentive, engaged, caring, devoted, or are you using repetitive words as labeling here? 
We do hang on to stupid things and some of us have stupid attachments to those things. The struggle is real. ;)

Wonderful poeming.


~Deb

 

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Re: Ink

Post by ajduclos » Wed Jan 08, 2020 7:15 am

Very nice, Colm.  Evocatively written, pulling at stored items and thoughts.  You strike so many interwoven chords here.  Especially "keys without locks", "in a cardboard box", "for no reason", except there was a powerful reason - inability to let go... which you explore wonderfully.

I personally like the "dried instantly" without a hyphen.  I see it as two words................

Agree with Deb - see if something can be done to the "good parent" repetition to change it up a bit.

Agree with Tracy - a chapbook "distributed by pedlars" is calling    ImageImage

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Re: Ink

Post by Colm Roe » Fri Jan 10, 2020 8:25 pm

Deb and Aj,
Didn't notice good x 2! Thanks :)

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Re: Ink

Post by Colm Roe » Fri Jan 10, 2020 8:29 pm

Curious to know how S1 has been understood?

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