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Island Fiction

Posted: Thu Dec 26, 2019 9:06 pm
by Matty11
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Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Fri Dec 27, 2019 8:01 pm
by Colm Roe
A nice slice of island life...sounds like Heaven to my ears  :)

Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2020 8:42 am
by Matty11
Colm Roe wrote:
Fri Dec 27, 2019 8:01 pm
A nice slice of island life...sounds like Heaven to my ears  :)
Thanks Colm. I didn't want to suggest 'heaven' and therefore revised a tad to counterbalance the 'comfortable' aspect.

cheers

Phil
 

Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2020 6:13 pm
by Colm Roe
When I say Heaven I mean the idea of living on an island,
a simple life lived close to nature :)

Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Sun Jan 12, 2020 12:46 pm
by Wren Tuatha
Matty11 wrote:
Thu Dec 26, 2019 9:06 pm
Hi Matty, love the word choices and sonics here. A musical treat! Thanks!

I could murder a cuppa       hangover?
 mutters a knitting voice,
her claws purling patterns
  the Fair Isle way.                 love the knitting metaphor. Assume purling is the verb, had to read it a couple of times in the dense economy to be sure.

The kettle whistles, the brew
  as warming as a jumper -   not sure I'm inside this simile. not sure if I lose it at warming or jumper. I am a landlover... Never mind got it on the third.
outside gulls rock and roll
  drunk on a burgundy sky.

The winged ways gleam
  in those full-throated, fish
-happy voices. She hears
  the thrill of fraying waves.  Excellent final stanza, especially the last line--thrill of fraying waves!

 

Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Sun Jan 12, 2020 11:19 pm
by Matty11
Colm Roe wrote:
Thu Jan 09, 2020 6:13 pm
When I say Heaven I mean the idea of living on an island,
a simple life lived close to nature :)
Thanks for coming back Colm. Yes, the distinctions between simple and limiting have an individual consequence as are those 'progressions' outside tradition.

best

Phil
 

Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Sun Jan 12, 2020 11:22 pm
by Matty11
Assume purling is the verb,
Yes, it is Wren. Thank you for that thumbs up on the final line. A dud concluding line can kill the whole poem!

best

Phil

Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Mon Jan 13, 2020 3:23 am
by Gyppo
Sleepily evocative.

Fraying waves:  I would never have thought of them this way, but now you've mentioned it the image has stuck.  Waves along the shoreline sometimes seem more solid than liquid, despite their movement, so fraying is a good metaphor.

Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Wed Jan 15, 2020 1:34 am
by Matty11
Thanks for the thumbs up on that G. I wanted that one to work to contrast with the 'binding' of knitting.

best

Phil

Re: Island Fiction

Posted: Wed Jan 15, 2020 11:22 am
by poet-e
Nice imagery.