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Island Fiction
Posted: Thu Dec 26, 2019 9:06 pm
by Matty11
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Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Fri Dec 27, 2019 8:01 pm
by Colm Roe
A nice slice of island life...sounds like Heaven to my ears
Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2020 8:42 am
by Matty11
Colm Roe wrote: ↑Fri Dec 27, 2019 8:01 pm
A nice slice of island life...sounds like
Heaven to my ears
Thanks Colm. I didn't want to suggest 'heaven' and therefore revised a tad to counterbalance the 'comfortable' aspect.
cheers
Phil
Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Thu Jan 09, 2020 6:13 pm
by Colm Roe
When I say Heaven I mean the idea of living on an island,
a simple life lived close to nature
Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Sun Jan 12, 2020 12:46 pm
by Wren Tuatha
Matty11 wrote: ↑Thu Dec 26, 2019 9:06 pm
Hi Matty, love the word choices and sonics here. A musical treat! Thanks!
I could murder a cuppa hangover?
mutters a knitting voice,
her claws purling patterns
the Fair Isle way. love the knitting metaphor. Assume purling is the verb, had to read it a couple of times in the dense economy to be sure.
The kettle whistles, the brew
as warming as a jumper - not sure I'm inside this simile. not sure if I lose it at warming or jumper. I am a landlover... Never mind got it on the third.
outside gulls rock and roll
drunk on a burgundy sky.
The winged ways gleam
in those full-throated, fish
-happy voices. She hears
the thrill of fraying waves. Excellent final stanza, especially the last line--thrill of fraying waves!
Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Sun Jan 12, 2020 11:19 pm
by Matty11
Colm Roe wrote: ↑Thu Jan 09, 2020 6:13 pm
When I say Heaven I mean the idea of living on an island,
a simple life lived close to nature
Thanks for coming back Colm. Yes, the distinctions between
simple and
limiting have an individual consequence as are those 'progressions' outside tradition.
best
Phil
Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Sun Jan 12, 2020 11:22 pm
by Matty11
Assume purling is the verb,
Yes, it is Wren. Thank you for that thumbs up on the final line. A dud concluding line can kill the whole poem!
best
Phil
Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Mon Jan 13, 2020 3:23 am
by Gyppo
Sleepily evocative.
Fraying waves: I would never have thought of them this way, but now you've mentioned it the image has stuck. Waves along the shoreline sometimes seem more solid than liquid, despite their movement, so fraying is a good metaphor.
Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Wed Jan 15, 2020 1:34 am
by Matty11
Thanks for the thumbs up on that G. I wanted that one to work to contrast with the 'binding' of knitting.
best
Phil
Re: Island Fiction
Posted: Wed Jan 15, 2020 11:22 am
by poet-e
Nice imagery.