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indar
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Home with a Cold (response is prize winning)

Post by indar » Tue Feb 18, 2020 11:24 am

How many trees, oh Lord,
were felled to supply this sea
of snot-infused wads
that waft across the sofa,
table-tops and rug?

No schematic
of the human head
accounts for apparatus
nor storage tank
to accommodate
such prodigious pouring forth
of foreign-seeming
green-tinged slime.

To what purpose, Lord,
didst thou endow
the sino-nasal system
such unexpected,
awe inspiring tyger-
tyger probuscus sized
seeming plethora?
  


 

poet-e
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Re: Home with a Cold (either interpretation acceptable)

Post by poet-e » Tue Feb 18, 2020 1:05 pm

My interpretation is N asking God what the purpose of letting us get sick, wasting tissue.

What's the other interpretation?

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Home with a Cold (either interpretation acceptable)

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Tue Feb 18, 2020 1:41 pm

'Snot A Response Poem

Oh Dearest Daughter I do not capriciously
overwhelm your tubular schnoz-ish appendage,
your nasal canon, for my own entertainment alone,
nor solely to unjustly enrich those engaged 
in the tissue supply chain, but rather
to protect you, my vulnerable, allergic pomegranate, 
from your obsessive insistence on snout-sucking 
whatever viruses, bacteria and allergens
your Hoover-strength proboscis can suction
from the planet’s biosphere.

And to thus arm you, my limpid lily pad, 
with such warrior mucus as to stand on guard, 
from adenoids to beak’s tip, and to surround
such of these foreign invaders, to blanket, 
to engulf and neutralize them, seriatim, 
to be expelled forthwith in violent rivers, or
to be Jimmy Hoffa’ed in dried chunks and later 
shot from the snoot into the tissued remnants 
of the Rockefeller Forest, my fluffy,
edible, hand lotion sample. And in reply 
to your initial query, my plenteous phlem factory,
the answer is 17.4 trees.

 

ajduclos
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Re: Home with a Cold (response is prize winning)

Post by ajduclos » Tue Feb 18, 2020 4:33 pm

Whoa - now this is a snooty discourse !!!!!!!!

indar
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Re: Home with a Cold (response is prize winning)

Post by indar » Tue Feb 18, 2020 4:37 pm

I am humbled and struck speechless--I mean--I had no idea anyone in our company could have come up with such a succinct and appropriate response, Tracy has barely begun to plumb the depths of his ability to interpret and comment in a style that builds upon the original, be creative and actually answer the questions posed with a firm grounding in anatomical, biological understanding of the pathology of human illness. BRAVO! :D :D :D

indar
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Re: Home with a Cold (response is prize winning)

Post by indar » Tue Feb 18, 2020 4:38 pm

SNOOTY DISCOURSE SNOOTY DISCOURSE  :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: :lol:

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Colm Roe
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Re: Home with a Cold (response is prize winning)

Post by Colm Roe » Fri Feb 21, 2020 7:46 pm

Poor you :(
Hope you've recovered?
And I hate to say it...but I enjoyed your tale of discomfort ;)

indar
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Re: Home with a Cold (response is prize winning)

Post by indar » Sun Feb 23, 2020 10:21 am

Thanks Colm, I have determined that I will live.

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Re: Home with a Cold (response is prize winning)

Post by indar » Sun Feb 23, 2020 10:28 am

What's the other interpretation?

Home with a cold could be read :"(I am) home with a cold" or "my home has a cold" 

A member or two of a group on this forum that once belonged to another much larger forum organized the self-publication of some of our best poems. The title: As the Kettle Wolf Whistles. Oh the difference a hyphen can make. Wonder how sales are dong

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Re: Home with a Cold (response is prize winning)

Post by ajduclos » Sun Feb 23, 2020 5:33 pm

Hyphen ?!?  How about an "i" !!!!!!!!!  ;)

Aj

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