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Tracy Mitchell
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2/25/20

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Tue Feb 25, 2020 10:58 am

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2/25/20

I reread what I have written 
to discover honor to be horror
and distillate to be density.

The words I intended to type 
are sharp and lack tact, but 
I type tasty.  Slack and luck.

It is a sterile, solitary garage
yet respite 
in the seeds of the garden.



 
Last edited by Tracy Mitchell on Tue Feb 25, 2020 12:34 pm, edited 1 time in total.

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by indar » Tue Feb 25, 2020 11:40 am

The frustration of translating those great, overwhelming feelings into words. The insertion of a garage into the mix puzzled me so that I googled "garage". If the reader REALLY is allowed to interpret poetry then I will choose my own use of the word "garage"--there are garage bands and garage music: a certain raw, unrefined burst of potential.

Works for me.

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Tue Feb 25, 2020 12:09 pm

I should have italicized 'garage' and 'garden', I think.  Yes, the frustration -- especially when the process fails.

Cheers.

T

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by indar » Tue Feb 25, 2020 12:32 pm

YES the italics would change everything

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Tue Feb 25, 2020 12:35 pm

Edit done. Are we drifting toward lucidity now?   😏

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by indar » Tue Feb 25, 2020 12:54 pm

Drifting Toward Lucidity---great title for a poem

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Tue Feb 25, 2020 1:41 pm

indar wrote:
Tue Feb 25, 2020 12:54 pm
Drifting Toward Lucidity---great title for a poem

Perhaps, but not one of mine :D :D :D

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by indar » Tue Feb 25, 2020 6:13 pm

More than one great thinker (including Jung) has pointed out that humans are the only animal that live most of their reality through symbol. And symbols can never fully encompass the existant thing they represent. There are some things I never speak (or write) about because to so do diminishes the event. So every poem I write is doomed to in some part fail.

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by Colm Roe » Tue Feb 25, 2020 6:56 pm

Like this...as long as garage is a verb?
Tell me it's a verb!

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Re: 2/25/20

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Wed Feb 26, 2020 7:35 am

Sorry Colm, I don't  know what you are asking.

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