Old poetry, old Poet

Tim J Brennan · Post by **Tim J Brennan** » Wed Mar 18, 2020 7:41 am

a dark forest,
dense with spruce
and fir—

no echoes, only a raven,
cawing overheard

~ ~ ~

most evenings,
behind pleated curtains

soft piano scales
ascend, descend, diminish

Post by **indar** » Wed Mar 18, 2020 9:34 am

Hi Tim,

Lovely lines to begin with but this S depends on Latinate language that seems out of place:

evening, all external activity
has ceased

Tim J Brennan · Post by **Tim J Brennan** » Wed Mar 18, 2020 7:11 pm

indar wrote: ↑
Wed Mar 18, 2020 9:34 am
Hi Tim,

Lovely lines to begin with but this S depends on Latinate language that seems out of place:

evening, all external activity
has ceased

I can just take it out. Thanks.

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