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Ike
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Waxing

Post by Ike » Sat Mar 28, 2020 8:32 am

October 7:
                    Whispering pines.
                    Beset.

November 23:
                    Lightning dropped the grid.
                    Whispering pines.
                    Beset.
                    Crescent.

January 6:
                    Beset.
                    Snow tamed the trees' howl.
                    "Hello."
                    Waning.

February 18:
                    "Hello."
                    "Hello."
                    Overcast.
                    Beset.

February XX>18:
                    "Hi,"
                    9:41 a.m.
                    Partly cloudy

Dave
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Re: Waxing

Post by Dave » Sat Mar 28, 2020 1:03 pm

Interesting and different. Not quite relating to the word beset in this context yet but clearly it is a core idea as it is repeated. Good post.

Dave
 

indar
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Re: Waxing

Post by indar » Sat Mar 28, 2020 2:48 pm

This reads as notations in a journal of sorts that somewhat tracks the moon phases which can cause some individuals to feel beset--no comment on the phase in entries that use the word beset. I wonder if "Waxing" refers to the moon phase or the state of mind of the Narrator/journal keeper. There is a good idea behind this one but somehow I need a little more to feel engaged by it. Good to see you back Ike
 

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Tracy Mitchell
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Re: Waxing

Post by Tracy Mitchell » Mon Mar 30, 2020 4:20 pm

Ike!

Welcome back. Love this post -- incredibly evocative as well as frustratingly cryptic. Not a bad combination, in my view.

I think 'allusive' is the word I am looking for. The progressions of this poem fall somewhere between what a narrative poem might unload on the reader as reference points, and what an image might allow the reader to dredge from their own palette of instinctual reactions.

I am struck with how poetic you have made the word "beset". It is loaded, and you are able to bring that out, to play with it.

Cheers.

T

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