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Waxing
Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2020 2:32 am
by Ike
October 7:
Whispering pines.
Beset.
November 23:
Lightning dropped the grid.
Whispering pines.
Beset.
Crescent.
January 6:
Beset.
Snow tamed the trees' howl.
"Hello."
Waning.
February 18:
"Hello."
"Hello."
Overcast.
Beset.
February XX>18:
"Hi,"
9:41 a.m.
Partly cloudy
Re: Waxing
Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2020 7:03 am
by Dave
Interesting and different. Not quite relating to the word beset in this context yet but clearly it is a core idea as it is repeated. Good post.
Dave
Re: Waxing
Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2020 8:48 am
by indar
This reads as notations in a journal of sorts that somewhat tracks the moon phases which can cause some individuals to feel beset--no comment on the phase in entries that use the word beset. I wonder if "Waxing" refers to the moon phase or the state of mind of the Narrator/journal keeper. There is a good idea behind this one but somehow I need a little more to feel engaged by it. Good to see you back Ike
Re: Waxing
Posted: Mon Mar 30, 2020 10:20 am
by Tracy Mitchell
Ike!
Welcome back. Love this post -- incredibly evocative as well as frustratingly cryptic. Not a bad combination, in my view.
I think 'allusive' is the word I am looking for. The progressions of this poem fall somewhere between what a narrative poem might unload on the reader as reference points, and what an image might allow the reader to dredge from their own palette of instinctual reactions.
I am struck with how poetic you have made the word "beset". It is loaded, and you are able to bring that out, to play with it.
Cheers.
T