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Otherworldiness

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Dave
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Otherworldiness

Post by Dave » Sat Sep 12, 2020 9:12 am

Everyone on this train is foreign –                                                                                                          but the henna handed women                                                                                                                have wild faces; smell of desert spice.
The other passengers sit tight to themselves,
settled next to the windows and in corners                                                                                            attached to their bags and selves                                                                                                            while these nomads chatter and preen,                                                                                                  arrange and rearrange space and perceptions.

They need no baggage,
are wrapped deep blues night,
and canary yellows of morning,                                                                                                              their husky voices dark secrets.                                                                                                              
                                                                                                                                                              Their boundlessness                                                                                                                                lends them such grace
no base thought can contain them

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Colm Roe
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Re: Otherworldiness

Post by Colm Roe » Sun Sep 13, 2020 7:10 pm

Good read Dave.
Well written (strange format aside) and with great respect for these modern nomads.
are wrapped deep blues night, Are you missing a word here?

Dave
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Re: Otherworldiness

Post by Dave » Mon Sep 14, 2020 5:36 am

Hi Colm
Thanks. I simply could get the poem to format properly, especially on the mobile phone, it does whatever it wants. I have no idea how to change it. No word missing.

Dave

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