power play

[Dansinger]

power play

the pawns are placed
and tickets licensed
the clown's jokes
chill to the bone

[Gyppo]

The clown lost, but it was much closer than it should have been.

[Tracy Mitchell]

I wonder what you would think of a closing line something like -- "chill to the bone". The reason I ask is that it would remove the explicit appearance of the narrator. I think there are maybe some pro's and con's each way. Just a thought.

Cheers.

T

[indar]

I lean toward Tracy's suggestion---the bone-chill is universal among those of us who value democracy and not living under authoritarian rule and the poem has more punch when presented that way. But Dan---I feel you bro.

[Dansinger]

The clown lost, but it was much closer than it should have been.

My thoughts exactly, Gyp.


T, Linda, I think I'll do that. Chill to the bone does sound better. Thanks.

Now let's hope for a relatively smooth transition. The clown is a weirdo - and that's putting it nicely.

[Dansinger]

But Dan---I feel you bro.

And I'm not even a US citizen. Go figure. It must be much worse for you.