Contemplating a New Year's Resolution
Posted: Fri Nov 20, 2020 7:58 pm
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Tim J Brennan wrote: ↑Fri Nov 20, 2020 7:58 pmA woman peals apples, - peels?
setting them so as not to bruise,
into her mother’s wooden bowl—
one is heart-shaped, juice drops
like temperature before a rain. - the kind of phrase that doesn't really make sense but is lovely anyway
Near her, a pitcher of ice - I'd suggest ice-water, on the same line
water sweats clear beads
alongside table salt,
ghosts of missing links - I don't really understand these last 2 lines
within its whiteness.
Outside her window, ice - again I think ice crystals is better on the same line
crystals grow like tiny lenses,
even as earth’s orbit promises
resurrection and coverage - interesting choice, coverage, maybe "coverage of"?
for a past year's sins.
Thank you, Dave. I have heard that great minds think alike.