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Moon Landing (a repost in honor of today's Mars Landing)

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indar
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Moon Landing (a repost in honor of today's Mars Landing)

Post by indar » Thu Feb 18, 2021 5:37 pm

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When the advanced race 
of Ribbed Ameoba landed
on the moon,
they globbed aghast
at irrefutable evidence:
there in ancient moondust
the bodily imprint
of a Ribbed Ameoba child
that predated by millenia
the scientific consensus
they had evolved
only after the great extinction
of the first wave of life.
 

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Re: Moon Landing (a repost in honor of today's Mars Landing)

Post by Matty11 » Fri Feb 19, 2021 1:28 am

Excellent Linda. Gives a perspective on some creation myths :D

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Re: Moon Landing (a repost in honor of today's Mars Landing)

Post by Gyppo » Fri Feb 19, 2021 4:41 am

Good to see it again, Indar ;-)

I remember our little shop girl coming into work that day, looking and moving like a zombie because she'd stayed up all night to see those flickering grainy images on a black and white TV.  They sent her home at lunchtime because she was so 'spaced out'.

I asked her later if it was worth it.

"There's only one first moon landing."  But she showed no interest in any other space exploits.

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Re: Moon Landing (a repost in honor of today's Mars Landing)

Post by Mark » Fri Feb 19, 2021 11:34 am

Nicely done and with a sinister underlay.

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Re: Moon Landing (a repost in honor of today's Mars Landing)

Post by TrevorConway » Sat Feb 20, 2021 1:15 pm

Very interesting, and I think it works well, Indar, but only in conjunction with teh image. If you ever decide to present the poem without the image, I think some description of the footprint (making it explicit that the footprint resemble the ribbed amoeba) would eb needed. Nicely sinister, as Mark said.

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Re: Moon Landing (a repost in honor of today's Mars Landing)

Post by indar » Sat Feb 20, 2021 2:19 pm

Thank you all, Phil, Gyppo, Mark and Trevor, for the read and comments.

This is one of those writes that is only good on the occasion it is written for (I think I did this for a  landmark anniversay of the first moon landing)----until an even better occasion comes along, like searching for ancient life on Mars

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Re: Moon Landing (a repost in honor of today's Mars Landing)

Post by Colm Roe » Sun Feb 21, 2021 4:53 am

Nice one Linda, and well done Perseverance :D

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