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Colm Roe
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Silence

Post by Colm Roe » Thu Nov 16, 2023 6:49 pm

Silence #1

Autumn's palette 
initiates a signal to fall

I sit behind glass
and will them to cling
to resist the breeze's instructions
to grip hard
and then harder 
when sodden and heavy 
even the rain scolds
their obdurate stance

they could stay
I know they could
but one by one
they drop silent
 
shouldn't their detachment make a sound
a cruel little snap
register a tiny yelp of pain

behind the glass that separates us
I sometimes wonder who's the specimen

and them 
all peace and quiet 
just following their paths
looking in
wondering about the strange reluctance
of all the artifacts
observing them.

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Re: Silence

Post by skylightgreg » Fri Nov 17, 2023 7:55 am

Love the play with point of view here.

Really enjoyable read.

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Colm Roe
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Re: Silence

Post by Colm Roe » Sun Nov 19, 2023 7:07 pm

Thanks, Greg  :)

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Re: Silence

Post by Dave » Tue Nov 21, 2023 10:50 am

Hey Colm
Atypical Colm piece in the best sense, playful, meaningful and with an easy way with words and pictures. Nicely done

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Re: Silence

Post by Colm Roe » Tue Nov 21, 2023 6:54 pm

Thanks, Dave. 
Much appreciated  :)

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Re: Silence

Post by Matty11 » Thu Nov 23, 2023 1:12 am

Very much enjoyed Colm. Perspectives, inside/outside, invite the reader to reflect on insistence/acceptance/resistance. A rewarding and resonant read.

Phil

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Re: Silence

Post by Gyppo » Thu Nov 23, 2023 1:46 am

'they could stay
I know they could
but one by one
they drop silent
 
shouldn't their detachment make a sound
a cruel little snap
register a tiny yelp of pain'



Maybe they do, Colm, but we are lucky enough not to hear it.  Autumn would be agony if we could hear such sounds.

Lovely poem.

Gyppo
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Re: Silence

Post by Colm Roe » Thu Nov 23, 2023 5:36 pm

Many thanks, Phil and Gyppo  :)  I'm glad this one seems to work  :)

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Re: Silence

Post by Gyppo » Sat Dec 09, 2023 8:02 am

I'm sure that admin will, in the fullness of time, delete these spurious ads from Colm's thread.  But, having seen a new name , I was bitterly disappointed to find they were a Spammer

Francis Crype would be a glorious name for a poet.

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Re: Silence

Post by Mark » Sat Dec 09, 2023 10:25 am

I deleted the spam and banned the spammer - pity, I agree Francis Crype is a great name for a poet in a  R.L. Stevenson sort of way. 

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