Very well done. My problem (one of them) with the form is finding a conductive theme, POV and voice. An image-driven poem is ill-suited, and attempting a successful story narrative is next to impossible. You seemed to have had no trouble finding the sweet spot with this poem. I am impressed.
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Dream Girl - a pantoum
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Thank you , Catherine and Tom.
No, I had no problem at all finding the theme. It was there, right for the grabbing. In a sense I could say the poem found me, rather than the other way round.
Yes, Catherine, it is sad, but also indeed a fact. We live with the things we cannot change, because we don't really have a choice, eh? The only choice we have, is how we deal with the sadness that life inevitably brings to all of us.
No, I had no problem at all finding the theme. It was there, right for the grabbing. In a sense I could say the poem found me, rather than the other way round.
Yes, Catherine, it is sad, but also indeed a fact. We live with the things we cannot change, because we don't really have a choice, eh? The only choice we have, is how we deal with the sadness that life inevitably brings to all of us.