Poem - The Arrival of Winter

[Bev]

This was my experience living in South Korea. It was a new experience for me, having grown up in a coastal sub-tropical city.
 

The Arrival of Winter

 

Winter skeletons stand stark

against nature’s grey palette

only remnants remain of sultry summer.

 

Autumn’s ambient accents

were but an accident,

an avalanche of colour

so quickly superceded

by spindly skeletons,

beckoning grim reapings,

of

Winter’s Wasteland

 

[Sharon Leigh]

Beautifully painted. You have a natural ear. Just my opinion but you don't even need the final 2 lines, "of" and "Winter's Wasteland" , ends perfectly at "reapings", in this reader's view, anyway

Wonderful first post, thanks for sharing!

Best,
Sharon

[midnightcandle]

Agree with Sharon re the ending. Wonderful picture you paint Bev.

[Mark]

Nicely portrayed. S1 is quite powerful in its way. An enjoyable read and a respectable first outing. Critically, you sail almost too close to the wind with the alliteration but it does work. I agree with Sharon and Daryl about the ending and would reconsider the centre alignment and italics.